I entered in the last aggregate round and completely disagreed with the coment by the Judge. I plan to enter this as it is to a couple of external Salons shortly to see if I am right but thought it might be a useful discussion for Critique Group. The judge said that the sloping groyne should be removed giving a veiw on through. As it is, the viewers eyes do travel to the "offending" groyne then return back to the large detailed Groyne front/left which is well lit and the main onject I wish to be seen. This shot is exactly as taken. I have produced a version with the "offending" groyne removed (by PS) and it completley loses impact as your eyes are pulled away from the scene.
I like the leaning groin.
David A
I think the right hand groyne is important for balance and context, so i would definitely keep it.
I do think however that the light on the rocks and scrubland on the left edge pull your eye away from the well lit groyne on the left.
A small crop from the top (about a third of the sky) and a similar crop (halfway to the foot of the groyne) on the right make the well lit groyne much more prominent.
Cheers, Des :-)
i like the leaning groyne, if it wasnt there think your eye would carry on throught the image and stop at the land mass on the other side and not come back to the groyne you are interested in, agree with Des's suggestion re crops, also maybe slightly darken the scrubland on the side and slightly lighten the groyne to help it stand out more
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I entered in the last aggregate round and completely disagreed with the coment by the Judge. I plan to enter this as it is to a couple of external Salons shortly to see if I am right but thought it might be a useful discussion for Critique Group. The judge said that the sloping groyne should be removed giving a veiw on through. As it is, the viewers eyes do travel to the "offending" groyne then return back to the large detailed Groyne front/left which is well lit and the main onject I wish to be seen. This shot is exactly as taken. I have produced a version with the "offending" groyne removed (by PS) and it completley loses impact as your eyes are pulled away from the scene.
I like the leaning groin.
David A
I think the right hand groyne is important for balance and context, so i would definitely keep it.
I do think however that the light on the rocks and scrubland on the left edge pull your eye away from the well lit groyne on the left.
A small crop from the top (about a third of the sky) and a similar crop (halfway to the foot of the groyne) on the right make the well lit groyne much more prominent.
Cheers, Des :-)
i like the leaning groyne, if it wasnt there think your eye would carry on throught the image and stop at the land mass on the other side and not come back to the groyne you are interested in, agree with Des's suggestion re crops, also maybe slightly darken the scrubland on the side and slightly lighten the groyne to help it stand out more